Young Writers Society

this part I'm not so sure, I don't know if I like how it flows. So please

tell me what you think.

When Jake got to the rider, Rogue was standing guard over the body.

The rider was small and childlike. It looked like a young boy. The boy was

whimpering like a wounded animal. Jake reached down and turned the

boy over to find pain filled green eyes staring back at him. Then Jake

realized that it wasn't a young boy at all. He was shocked to find a girl

instead.

"what in the hell is a girl doing up here?"he said

Jake decided he could ask more questions once they were dry. He

picked her up and started for his cabin. "So what are you doing on

my land?"

All he got was a moan. Rogue followed close by and kept looking at

the woods like there was something or someone in them. Jake wondered

if the two riders were watching as he carried their comrade to his house

and thought that they might come to take her back. Then he figured by

the way they hightailed it out of here they wouldn't be coming back for

awhile. He took her into his cabin and laid her on on his bed. The cabin

was scantly furnished and in need of a good cleaning. Thinking he would

get the same answer as before ,but figured he would give it a shot anyways

he asked "do you at least have a name?"

"Rose" she whispered.

this isn't the end but I can't finish typing so I'll finish soon. please comment it'll be appreciated {2nd edit}